Year Long Reflection

Since the beginning of the year I have struggled with small convention errors within my work. I also didn’t do very well in using voice, sentence fluency, and organization. The areas that I have done well in are having a good thesis statement, but I haven’t been able to argue it well throughout my papers. I have improved in my word choice over the year.

Over the year my writing has began to progress overall. I have been making better grades on my papers. I think this has been a result of more revising and editing before I turn in my papers. I noticed this because before I was doing this I was having a lot of small mechanics errors such as missing a comma or spelling something, which can be easily fixed if I had, took more time to look over it.

This strengths and weaknesses have been noticeable the whole year. As, the year has progressed the minor weaknesses have been erased but, the major ones are still there.   Some of these major weaknesses include using better transitions and arguing my points with sufficient details.  If you look at my first paper which was the literary narrative had more comments than the global issues paper. Even though there were more comments on the first paper, the last paper had the same comments just less minor errors and this brought up my grades but I still haven’t fixed the major points.

Most of the feedback on my papers said the same things. The comments said that I need better transitions and that I wasn’t interpreting what my teacher and I were discussing in our conferences. I thought that I was interpreting what we were discussing, but I didn’t do it well enough in my paper. Over the year my before paper has improved greatly. At first I would just turn the paper in after I do correct obvious mistakes but I wouldn’t carefully go through it.  I became more efficient at it after I started losing points on simple mistakes. Also I don’t write clearly in my papers sometimes. I shift in my tone a lot and this can be hard to understand when trying to read a paper.

The turning point of my revising problems was the profile paper. I had made so many comments on simple things that I was surprised I relieved the grade that I did.  After that point I told myself that I needed to get more serious about English and from then on I would put more effort into my papers.  In the future I am going to work on my transitions and organizations. I am probably going to need more time with my teacher to help me understand and progress in this particular area. If I get this down pact then I will probably do better on my papers as a whole.

Common Errors List

·         Proofreading- In T-Crank I put although he is a larger than most of his friends and family.

·         Incorrect spelling-piece instead of peace

·         Weak transition – in Literary Analysis

·         POQ- was frequent in one paper kept putting “A”

·         Fragments- something simple-But, by him making jokes about people affected his feeling

Homage to My Hips

 One of the poems we had to analyze was  "Homage to My Hips". This poem is extremely creative. It has unique features that make it stand out from other poems. One feature is that there are no capital letters in the poem whatsoever. If you sit back and just look  at the poem as a whole, by having no capital letters adds a shape to the structure of the poem and the shape of the poem is that of hips.

 This shows one way the poem is related to the title of it. The repetitiveness of the words these and they, show that she owns the hips but, the hips have a mind of there "own". This gives a sense of personification to the poem. This is a literary element that is used to create a good poem. There are many more things to talk about in this poem but this is the one i decided to focus on in my blog.


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Spring Break

Hello everyone. This spring break was a fun spring break for me. It started off with a visit to my dad's house in Mississipi. Although I didn't get to ride my horse, I was able to go to two rodeos and they were very entertaining. Easter Sunday I went to church at six o'clock in the morning. That was extremely boring, but the next day I had to come back to Louisiana because,  I had to go on vaction to Gulf Shores, Alabama,

This year I chose Gulf Shores as my beach vaction because I haven't been there before. I really couldn't get a tan because I've had one since fourteen years ago. But, I just like being in the water. On our vacation we went shopping, out to eat and to the beach. At the end of our stray my mother took us to Destin, Florida for a day. There I went swimming and went on a soothing walk on the beach.  After all this I was extremely tired but, I still lved my vacation.

"My Papa's Waltz"

My papas waltz in a literal sense means that the narrator's father does the waltz dance. The poem is literally describing the dancing of her father in the kkitchen. The first stanza is stating that rthe father has been drinking whisckey and it is hard to dance with a drunk man. The second stanza is stating that they danced in the kitchen so hard the pans fell and the mother had a frown on her face because of them doing so.The next stanza is saying that the father had dirty hands and a hurt knuckle and the the narrators head would scrape the buckle of her father's belt while the danced. The final stanza states that the father tapped on the narrator's head with a dirty hand and they danced off to bed.

The whiskey on his breath means that he has been and in the next line it states it could make a small boy dizzy shows that the father has been drinking heavily.  Also, the caked dirt shoes that the father must have been at work for it to cake up onto his hands. In every stanza the rhyme scheme was the same, the first and third line rhymed and the second  and fourth line oof each stanza rhymed. from the clues within the text you could tell she was danceing with her father and was talking to him in the story. The narrator speaks in a happy tone like  she is happy that she is dancing with her drunk father. The Author on the other hand is describing more of a drunken father who is dancing with his daughter and tearing things up and bothering everyone else. Each stanza is a sentence with enjambments within it. And, every two lines is and enjambment. This adds shifts and creates more than one point per stanza. Now the title means that her father's dance is what she yern's for because this is when he spends time with her.. The theme for the poem is that spending time with your child makes them happy even if you are drinking. I did this in the TP-CASTT concept.